Sample work English Studies Year 12: We are Australians – narrative writing

See sample narrative responses, outcomes and criteria for assessment. Samples are at different grade levels.

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Task

Students draft and edit a narrative that has as its focus an image of the word 'Aussie' written on the beach in seaweed.

Context

During the study of this module, students develop an awareness of complex aspects of Australian citizenship, community and cultural identity. They develop language skills appropriate to participating in discussion and decision-making about these matters and conducting their lives as citizens and members of communities. They engage with and critique literary texts that present the diversity of cultures, peoples, perspectives and voices that contribute to Australian society. Students develop their understanding of the power of language to communicate ideas effectively, and develop their ability to use language imaginatively, expressively and purposefully.

Outcomes

A student:

ES12-4 composes proficient texts in different forms

ES12-6 uses appropriate strategies to compose texts for different modes, media audiences, contexts and purposes

ES12-7 represents own ideas in critical, interpretive and imaginative texts

Criteria for assessment

Students will be assessed on their ability to:

explore ideas about Australian identity imaginatively and incorporate the image into a narrative
develop ideas coherently and appropriately to the narrative form
express ideas clearly
demonstrate control of language.

Marking scheme

The following marking scheme shows one approach to assigning a value to a student's work.

A student:	Range
Composes an imaginative response that effectively and convincingly incorporates the image to explore ideas about Australian identity Demonstrates well-developed understanding of the conventions of the narrative form Demonstrates consistent, effective control of language appropriate to audience and purpose	9–10
Composes an imaginative response that competently incorporates the image to explore ideas about the Australian identity Demonstrates sound understanding of the conventions of the narrative form Demonstrates competent control of language appropriate to audience and purpose	7–8
Composes a response that incorporates the image Demonstrates developing understanding of the conventions of the narrative form Demonstrates developing ability to use language consistently appropriate to audience and purpose	5–6
Composes a response that incorporates the image into the narrative in a limited way Demonstrates a basic understanding of the conventions of the narrative form Demonstrates variable control of language	3–4
Composes a response that makes little or no reference to the image Attempts to organise a response in an elementary way Demonstrates elementary control of language	1–2

Graded student work samples

Please note: Work samples are presented exactly as submitted by the student. To assist with grading, spelling and grammatical errors have not been corrected and formatting has not been changed.

Grade B

Quinn

We are Australians - English in citizenship, community and cultural identity: Narrative writing - Quinn (PDF 92.55KB)

This response demonstrates a sound understanding of narrative structure as it attempts to explore the concept of Australian identity through the imaginative incorporation of the image. While the figurative language is at times clichéd, there is evidence of methodically ‘crafting’ the story with the use of appropriate visual description to engage the reader. This response demonstrates characteristics of work typically produced by a student performing at grade B standard at the end of the course.

Grade E

Stacey

We are Australians - English in citizenship, community and cultural identity: Narrative writing - Stacey (PDF 79.86KB)

This response demonstrates an elementary connection with the sense of identity and incorporates the image as an afterthought. There is limited control of language and narrative form, and elementary understanding of audience. This response would benefit from closer editing and a greater focus on close description rather than superficial narrative. This response demonstrates characteristics of work typically produced by a student performing at grade E standard at the end of the course.

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